Introduction to a Cooking, Dancing, Pakistani Violinist
Hi, I am Sana. I am a psychology major, and I hope to attend medical school. My parents emigrated from Pakistan before I was born. (Pakistan Transportation, Web Source: Wikimedia ) I love to play the violin, dance, sing, and cook. I currently am on a Bollywood dance team and am in the Civic Orchestra at OU. I've been playing the violin for 10 years now, and I still don't know how to play it. I love to cook food from all across the world. My favorite cuisines to cook are Thai and Pakistani food. I am currently working on a new project where I make the national dish from every country once a week. It will take me a couple years to do it. I also love to make all kinds of desserts. I love making brownies, cakes, and pies from scratch. My favorite food is ice cream. I have two male tabby cats. They look exactly the same, so most people think that I only have one cat. They have completely different
Hi Sana! I thought it was very cool that you came up with the alcohol and fire origin story on your own. I thought it was very creative. I like the little details you put in the story like the clear purse and meeting up at McDonald's. I also like how you decided to change the story up and make it about two lovers instead of about children and their father. You did good rewriting the story without losing the original story's plot. Nice!
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ReplyDeleteI love how creative this story is! You made it much different than the original, and you also made it very modern and relevant to today's world. I thought this was so fun and creative. I also thought your author's note was very helpful in giving appropriate context and it really helped me to get into the story by seeing how much you changed and where you followed the thread of the original story. I loved reading this!
Hey Sana,
ReplyDeleteThis story is very creative, in my opinion. I like that you changed the original so much in your rendition; I think that's unusual! One suggestion I have would be to run your story through a grammar checker (like Grammarly) to catch any errors you may make! I use this for everything I write, so I don't have to proof-read as much, haha! Great job!